Revising your essays

As we've gone on, I've gotten a clearer idea of how I think your essays could be improved.  In your revision, I'd like you to rewrite at least two paragraphs, and focus on including your reflections in the moment.  In other words, your essays should still be thoughtful, should reflect on how you were influenced by the experience you describe, and should mention either The Scarlet Letter or Whitman or Dickinson--but those reflections should come in the context of a particular moment...  We'll talk about this in class.